Mission: Guild Warriors: Faction satisfaction MISSION INFORMATION Adventures of Loathing set out to impress the Council to get official support for the war on the Knob Goblins The notes for the one with the brutally long in terms of gameplay length, to the point I didn't know if we'd recover. Fortunately, as stated elsewhere, the game does bounce back. Due to the lengthy roleplay period, we got a decent amount of stories here. The next few missions manage to thankfully take AIL back to accomplishing this in a fraction of the time.     Just this mission, though, Becky Joy, Zanther Wolf, the Guacanator, Todd Blackpaws and Lapine all debut. Higgy makes his writing debut by helping me debut the new clan. We also meet the final Elite 7, Nilpha, see the debut of Shamus's Bulky Buddy Box (which is later claimed by Becky Joy), and meet few new NPC's as well! This is also one of the few missions to draw so directly on KOL for inspiration for a mission. The meat car want you to assemble a meat car in order to impress them so they'll support you in a war with the Knob Goblins. Slight spoilers: It was an actual mission in KOL at one point until they started sending you to the guild to get it instead. This was a couple missions before the Council claim the Knob Goblins are about to ask you; they ask you to kill the Goblin King "just in case." Ironically, the Knob Goblin King gets the first jump on the town! Anyway, here's the notes and score on the thing! Next mission, things really get rolling with the mission directly continued from the Finale here. Mission Notes #1 Posted by: Sebastian Dash   Official title: Guild Warriors: Faction satisfaction Rollover     To set the scene, the Kingdom of KOL has now made two attempts to get an audience with the Kingdom of KOL's reigning king in an attempt to get a sanction for their war with the Knob Goblins. The original visit had Blahking meeting with three representatives of the Council, who assigned two specific jobs for for the clan in return. In the end, though several adventurers set out on each demanding assignment, it was Shamus XTreme who dealt the final blow to the bonerdargon, while Sebastian Dash fulfilled the task of bringing the mosquito larva to the Council of Loathing. Thus, Shamus, Sebastian and the prince of the KOKOL clan came to call upon the meeting of the King... only to be told a meeting with the King could only be granted by a meeting with the full Council. Before that would be granted, they were sent to see the next five individual members of the Council, who proved even stranger than the original three. The Council Friends. Urgh. The assignment was, once again, twofold, although both involve impressing the three leaders of the local guild, who just happen to all be reserve Council of Loathing members, and thus are required to take part in the meeting to determine if KOKOL will be allowed to meet with the King of the Kingdom proper. The first assignment would have any interested members of KOKOL attempting to build the winning meatcar for a competition on behalf of whichever guild they're a part of. How do you built a meat car? I don't know.. I guess you'll have to find a way to get the information before you can proceed.. unless you've got the skills to create one with just your own knowledge. Be innovative and original here. I know how the game did it. How will YOU do it? I'll include a little "Letter from the Council" below, and leave it up to you how you get the details here. With Catrina being so busy, I might just leave roleplaying open a long while... I'm sure those of you who are still waiting to write will need some time to really warm up to this one. I'm not quite sure where I want everyone to end up for each mission yet- ideas could be posted here. Regardless, I'll most likely write a 'mini chapter' for each character that'll put them directly where they need to be for the Finale. Then I'll try to make it short and sweet while still having lots of fun with it. This's a mission where determining a winner should be fairly easy! Please consider having a few NPC's 'enter' the mission.. either clan members or (especially for the 'meat car' mission) outsiders who want to 'win' it for themselves! I plan to do that one, myself. Entertain us here. Show us character development, and help develop how our version of the KOL world works. Show me your character's strengths and weaknesses. Don't feel like you need to force the action into the story, but if it works, then use it. Here's a copy of a letter to KOKOL from Council member Jilla. The paper is a bit chewed, and some of the words at the bottom are scribbled over to the point you have no idea what they say, but most of it is read-able. I guess. I'll offer up extra long roleplaying. I don't plan to close this one until we get a good number of roleplays for each mission. So please be active and help us find our new blood we need! As of now, I expect to be writing both finales myself. I am also thinking it'd be a good time to start 'advertising' AIL more aggressively. =--------------   Howdly, folks! It's me, Jilla, your buddy on the Council! Along with my wonderful partner to whom I bear little physical or genetic resemblance, Zake, we've been talking to our fellow council members that you've already met, Cheatham, Dewey, Howe, Mendy, Glee our Wonder Monkey, and that goof Warvin! Glee was kinda chewing on this paper earlier, so it's not as groovy as it could be but I didn't want it to go to waste. Sorry about that. Like requested and promised, we've been talking to our final three reserve members, the awesome Gunther, that magic wielding nut Gorgonzola, and of course, Shifty, who we had to invite into the conversation as well.. Sorry about that. They LOVED your idea about entering the meat car creation process, so I hope you get a few members who come through on it! Or was it our idea? I can't remember.. Sorry about that. But they also liked the idea of having some of your clan members trying to impress them individually. Of course, being as we believe in fair responsibility and also, in balanced workloads, we're going to have to insist you only let each individual clannie take up one job each. Sorry about that. So I got down to business, but I could only get a few sentences from each guild leader. Sorry if it isn't enough, but I'm sure you can use your imagination.. If not, well.. you know. Gunther, our Lord of the Smacking, stated he wishes to see feats of great strength, valiancy, and appetite from your turtle tamers and seal clubbers! "Go forth into this brave world of ours and impose your will upon it!" Gorgonzola, the Chef-Magi of note, wrote to us saying he encouraged the use of "high intellect in addition to high magic" from those in his guild, your pastamancers and saucerors." Oh, and do something noble! Like he said, "Let me see sights to make my spirit soar and feats of nobility to make my soul sing!" The final one, I almost didn't want to agree to, but I had no choice. The low down, sneaky Shift doesn't care if you accordion thieves or disco bandits have to get your hands dirty for this job.. In fact, I think he practically is encouraging it! "I'm practically encouraging disco bandits and accordion thieves to get their hands dirty for this job!" he said. (Yeah, we hate that joke too, but it pretty much writes itself.) "Show me," he proclaims, "how dedicated you are to stea.. er.. finding me some sweet items through means legit or otherwise. Show me your moxious inner beauty, you scumbags!" So .. yeah.. I'm not touching that with a ten foot Feather Boa Constrictor! But don't worry! We made sure that, like I promised all of you.. IF you feel like impressing someone who leads a different guild, go right on ahead! You gotta submit the meat car to your own guild, but if you're not doing that, it's okay for say, a pastamancer to try to impress Boris.. or a turtle tamer to try and impress the Chef-magi clan.. Got it? Good! We think you should have each interested member talk to the guild leader he, she or it wants to impress, and also have them submit their official entry at the full meeting with the Counil, when we name the winner of the meat car mission, yay! Winner will receive grand prizes at our discretion! Get to work, KOKOL, cause we're pulling for ya! Right now, I think I'm going to go back with my --------- I mean boyfriend, so I can ------------ his --------- and see if he'll ------------- --------------------------------------------------- ------------------------------ with Ack, let me cross that out, I got a bit carried away there! (Sorry about that!) Signed, Jilla Girlfriend (and definitely not sister) to that handsome chunk Zake! Shake what your momma gave you, boy!   =------------ (Also, the y on your seems edited in. Curious. (And disturbing.)   -------------   Mission Notes #2 Posted by: Sebastian Dash   Also of note are the submission titles. Please pick the mission you'll be a part of, and title each roleplay with that mission's officil name at the start.   "Meat Car Mission"   Okay, the name is a bit bland. This's a straight forward mission. There's a contest going on where each Guild is trying to build the best meat car out of the bunch. The guild you represent is determined, like in game, by your class. That should influence how you go about things. People from outside the clan (NPC's) will presumably be entering the contest as well. Use them if you want. I know how the game does this- by getting a list in Degrassi Knoll. I hope we see something more original, though. If you DO decide to go to Degrassi Knoll, keep in mind, two KOKOL main rivals, the Penguin mafia and Knob Goblin kingdom, have underground but significant influence in AIL's version of both Degrassi Knoll and the much smaller South Degrassi. See the relevant previous missions for details. Mission titles would be something like Meat Car Mission: Death of TheChad or (Meat Car Mission) Here comes Zombie TheChad!   J/ Dash/ Shelly Girl     -------------   Mission Notes #3 Posted by: Sebastian Dash   Again,note the submission titles. Please pick the mission you'll be a part of, and title each roleplay with that mission's official name at the start. Thank you, Demon Llama (as known in the KOL game itself) for suggesting the name for this one!   "Impress for Success"   This is one I'm really leaving as open as possible! Try to impress any guild leaders in any manner you see fitting. Assume there are obstacles in your way, as many as you can handle! But I'd like to use the winner and anyone who's active in this mission in the Finale, to be in the official meeting. I figure you'll be getting ready to do some kind of routine at the meeting to officially try to win, alright? Cooking, baking, trying to steal a gem from the Penguin mafia.. I'd ask that we keep the sky itself *OFF LIMITS* for this season. Skim through AIL's other missions, if you want to get an idea of where we've been. So I guess just below the sky is the limit for this one. :) OH! And we (KOKOL) 'own' our own 'chronal mine' full of the items I'll use for Time Items in a future mission. If you'd like, read up on the "Chrono Dragon" mission and make use of it. Be innovative! But let's not use time swords or such equipment yet. I am saving that for the future as well. Suggestions for title format.... Impress for Success: The coming or (Impress for Success) The Last Stand J/ Dash/ Shelly Girl   -------------   Roleplay Notes intro - archive copy Posted by: AIL/ Dash   I have nothing fancy to say here! So here are Dash's opening notes.. :) Sorry not to get this up earlier! slipped my mind :)   Crossover: Vixen vrs. Catrina! (subtitle) Poor Dash, stuck in the middle This one basically gets things rolling, as Vixen sneaks up on Dash, still sour about the fact she thought she'd 'won' last mission only to have Riko hand Dash the victory! Dash gets her to be a bit less sour, and she vows to win the next mission.. then they set out for Dash's camp.. Where Catrina promptly gets jealous! the rp ends with Catrina and Vixen brawling around Dash's campground with Dash ducking it out inside of his tent.. Of course, there's more interesting details than that, but you'll have to read the rp for that ;) J/ Dash   -------------   Interlude - archive copy Posted by: Sebastian Dash   Alright this interlude sees the Winking Judge, a meatcycle pub, joining into the mission in order to appease the Council of Loathing and convince them to not insert a new bar tax, which would obviously affect the Winking Judge negatively. This is after they bribe one of the Council members.. what jerks those Council guys can be!   -------------   Dash and Blahking's only - archive copy Posted by: Dash   ♪ This was a co write ♪ ♪ I'm making a note of huge success! ♪ ♪ It's hard to overstate my satisfaction. ♪ CO WRITE with Blah! Hi, everyone! I see the board's .. let's be honest, dead right now, despite the huge influx of new members. That's okay. I'll write up a 'new user's guide' to hopefully kick start things! The story summery for the co-write? Blahking's hiding out in a bar in South Degrassi, where they met for the first time in AIL history way back when. Dash convinces Blahking his mind needs to be in the game (hopefully to set up a solo Blahking roleplay this mission), and the two get to talking business. Sorry the notes are so long, but there is a lot to cover! We establish TWO things either side can be a part of! The first one is a bit smaller. "An intelligent hybrid yeti" is supposed to be raising trouble in South Degrassi. Besides being the helpful thing to do for the citizens, Dash plans to deal with it and bring proof of his victory to the Council in an attempt to impress them at the meeting (Which'll be written in the Finale.) The victory will ALSO serve as a warning KOKOL means business when it comes to the Knob Goblins and Penguin Mafia, both of whom still have their claws very deeply in both Degrassi Knoll and South Degrassi.. although not every citizen there is necessarily aware of those connections. The OTHER event? Blahking is going to try to organize a big public event! Think a bit of a carnival, organized as a 'charity event.' It's primarily about raising our clan's spirit and bringing KOKOL closer together. Blahking and Dash have NOT gotten word on the new clan at this point! This ties into the fact that there are three contests- one for drink mixing, one for cooking, and a best eating/ drinking contest which will hopefully satisfy the 'muscle' guild. IF AIL'ers come up with additional ideas for the carnival, we can add them in, too. This carnival will take place not long before the official meeting, so I'll use both it and the meeting in the Finale, probably! :) There are opportunities aplenty, depending on what side you're on. KOKOL'ers could sign up to host an event, or be a part of one. Winking Judge members could crash the party, either to join a contest and try to win it on behalf of their guild, and therefore attract the attention of the guild leaders- or just to sabatoge the event for KOKOL. :) Expect retribution if you do the latter. Or you could head down to 'help' - or try to outdo- Dash with the yeti problem. I'll establish his personality in my next roleplay.. *Grins* Kmail me or PM me if you got questions or ideas of either of these.. remember, the actual KOKOL event probably won't be starting until late in roleplay period (after the deadline is announced), or during the Mission Finale itself. So if you want to take part, use your roleplays to find out about it, handle any related or unrelated manners, and start preparing! SD/ sg   -------------   Becky and Zanther's Only - archive copy Posted by: Sebastian Dash   Next up was a VERY quick, to the point introduction of Zanther_Wolf and Becky Joy!! How exciting! The two are going to end up taking part in the Impress for Success mission.. read it to get a decent ‘first feel’ for the two. They split up at the end which, if all goes to plan, will involve us each doing a co write on our own and, time permitting, at least one more co write. Becky heads to Seaside Town while Wolf was out hunting some food for him- then gathering some goodies to bring to Becky Joy! Can you guess who Becky is based on? RP title Welcome to Wolf's Jungle!, Becky Joy & Zanther_Wolf, Party Animals!   -------------   Note - archive copy 1 - archive copy 2 Posted by: Samus XTreme   Just some quick notes: for the last two RP's. Shamus, and Inu, left the council chamber, and decided to do the easier of the two missions: the meat car mission. After trying to ask some bugbears how to make a meat car, and being beaten half to death, Shamus woke up in the sleazy black ally. He then almost got killed by hobos, and eaten by spiders. Before being force-fed goofballs. After waking, (And, somehow Inuya finding out how to make a meat car.) he tried to get some rims, with his other Familiar: the bulky buddy box, "Useless". After a very helpful Market Demon, which Shamus didn't listen to. He got a trinket, traded it, and found out Inuya had already gotten some rims. After a brief anger fit, he met an old friend- Who proceeded to beat him half to death. After sorting things out; Shamus, and Inuya, drove to the competition. Hmmm, I probably could have used fewer words for that.   -------------   Note - archive copy Posted by: Sebastian Dash   I kept waiting on Guacanator to post his notes here, but since it's a simple rp, I'll sum his up.. heh.. in the roleplay before my Becky Joy short, Gua decides to take the meat car mission, rides down to the Gnome Camp, and gets someone to help him build his meat car.. which still has to be finished. THIS RP is notable because it adds in some very creative depth of history on the Gnomes and on Guacanator... Fleshes out their culture a little. Becky Joy rp notes THEN.. MY RP is just.. a short Becky Joy piece! She talks to a guard and finds out about the upcoming Clan carnival! Sweet news, isn't it? Anyway.. WE NEED MORE roleplays so get to writing, everyone! Wuv, Dash (Becky Joy)   -------------   Note - archive copy Posted by: The Guacanator   Ugh... sorry I couldn't post, I was otherwise enganged. I would like to add something to what Sebastian said. After his old friend, Gnowland, (yes, I know its a lame name) helped him build his meatcar, the duo realizes that the technology of the apparatus is so advanced it cannot run on a regular meat stack - It requires a HYPERDENSE meat stack, something that exists only in concept in the leading laboratories. However, if anyone knows how to make one of these items, it would be Bruce, a champion meat smith. Who also happens to be a Turtle Tamer. Who happens to spend all his time in The Brotherhood of Smackdown. Which happens to be behind enemy lines. Which happens to be very, very, bad at this time. Once again, I'm very sorry for not posting.   -------------   Dash's first of two - archive copy Posted by: Sebastian Dash   Hey! Notes on "Impress for Success (Dash): Meetings I: Dash's POV"   Another short Dash piece.. sorry it took so long.. We could really use some activity in AIL right now! That aside.. it's a pretty simple piece. I start off showing Dash side by side with a mysterious Katherine.. then I backtrack. Read the rp to get a strong inclination as to what Dash's been up to.. the most significant bit after the opening, is the closing.. Moving in the black of night, Dash runs into another figure! Turns out to be a her.. No surprise, it's the girl from the beginning of the rp.. They nearly fight in the darkness- but a well timed shaft of moonlight allows the two to indentify each other. I plan to do another rp soon- it'll be HER point of view, and maybe even reveal a bit about her.. she's only a NPC by the way.. Dash   -------------   Note - archive copy Posted by: The Guacanator   Guacanator has but one task left before his meatcar is finished - but it is the most challenging of all tasks. Guacanator goes deep behind enemy lines to find a meat smith talented enough to make a hyper dense meat stack. After some ingenious subterfuge, Guac finds his meatsmith, and obtains his meat stack. Of course, Bruce, the meatsmith, won't let Guac leave without a friendly tussel - as per muscle-class tradition. Of course, Bruce apparently does not know the meaning of "friendly," as Guac finds himself pinned to the ground and slowly asphyxiating. In desperation, and on pure instinct, Guac blows his cover and sends out a wave of sauce to knock back Bruce. Gunther, the leader of the muscle class, sends Guac running, and declares, "This means war." If the situation seemed bad, it will only get worse, as the Kingdom is on the verge of having its main guilds in a bloody, all-out conflict. Either that, or they'll all enter a cake-baking contest and have some scones and warm tea.   -------------   Sebstian's second of two - archive copy Posted by: Sebastian Dash   Nice setup for the finale, Gua! :D For my rp.. "Uncomfy silence.." we learn a little bit more about Katherine Swift and her history with Sebastian.. then we get to the point where they bump in the middle of the night... each comes to the conclusion that, given they got the same supposed 'intel' from some Knob teens, they're probably walking into a trap... Which neither seem to have a problem with- but I'll save THAT one for my next rp! Anyone interested in doing a co write with me set in South Degrassi? :D Dash/ Shelly   -------------   Becky's first solo of two - archive copy Posted by: Sebastian Dash   I had plans to do more.. but I wanted this rp to 'fit' with Becky's cameo in his upcoming roleplay- so you get this.. Becky wondering around Seaside Town, interacting with the locals, then hearing a mysterious voice.. who she starts to respond to- when she's interrupted by seeing Zanther Wolf coming at her with berries.. which causes Becky to totally forget about the mysterious voice.. for now.. More in wolf's rp and hopefully another Becky rp.. was fun to write! Titled "Don't eat ur pets" Pardon the spelling- was a space issue mostly .. but it fits Joy. :)   -------------   Dash, Cat, Vixen, Todd and Lapine - archive copy Posted by: Sebastian Dash   We got a monster of a roleplay to report on here. Sorry to say, it took a while to finally get it finished, but it's worth the wait. It goes back to pick up directly after the last roleplay with Catrina and Vixen still fighting. It is quickly broken up by the arrival of two new characters, however. Todd Blackpaws and Lapine showed up. Todd, being the only male there, tried flirting with both Cat and Vixen, even though Lapine announced herself as his girlfriend. Go figure. Oh- and it turns out, Lapine and Vixen are ex girlfriends. Vixen reveals she's gay to Catrina, cutting off Catrina's assumption Vixen had been hitting on Dash. Dash walks out eventually, after some flirting and backstory on the Vixen/ Lapine breakup. He and Vixen talk about the missions.. here it gets important, so pay up. After Vixen, Lapine and Todd all decide to go on the Meat Car mission (Which by the way, means we can set a deadline.. you got til September 12, 2009 to get your roleplays up! Then I am FINALLY going to start writing a Finale for this cursed mission. Sorry, it's not the month I promised, but hey- it's plenty of time if you really wanna get more up. I know I do! OH!- Soo.. Catrina is going on the mission with Dash! Pretty cool huh? More next time, more next time!   -------------   Zanther's only solo - archive copy Posted by: Zanther Wolf   Wolf was bringing the berries to Shelly, when a couple of ninjas stole them.. he chased them and squared off against the head demon,was beaten down but somehow transformed into a new form.. beating down the demon with those weird ice abilities.. when he returned to Becky, she was scared and confused. This is the beginning of Zanther's journeys.   -------------   Note - archive copy Posted by: Becky and Lapine's only co write   This one starts off with a very sad Becky Joy, who's got the Bulky Buddy Box discarded by Shamus. We'll find out she's obviously sad over Wolf going with that stranger girl, Shelly.. and Becky found the Box in the sewers and saved it!. After some amusing interaction with the box, Becky bumps into Lapine! Lapine is quick to listen to Becky's troubles with Wolf, and quicker with a hug to help! It cheers Becky up! They talk about the upcoming carnival and trade ideas. They decide on a kissing booth, but Lapine then remembers she'd promised to help Vixen and Todd Blackpaws build a meatcar, so it's up to Becky this time around! Oh- and we introduced a new fashion store named "The Zone." Where Lapine is shopping for clothes when Becky shows up! I got most of a Dash/ Catrina co write done with Cat. We should have it up by the official deadline.   -------------   Note - archive copy Posted by: Sebastian Dash   VERY tired so hopefully I won't miss any important notes.. since rp'ing is all but over, this's more for legacy anyway. Ahem. Kath and Dash are wondering in South Degrassi still seeking the rumors of the so called talking yeti. They find - and quickly dispatch- 3 penguins.. actually, the last one is finished off by what seems to be a talking Yeti.. Dash and Katherine engage it in battle for a while, but it seems to get the better of them. Cut to an interlude of Catrina arriving on the scene! She dispatches a few Knobs as she makes her way to the fight. Unfortunately, Kath and Cat mistake each other for enemies and start fighting. Luckily, they're able to quickly figure things out, and team up against the Yeti as most of the Knobs just stand around watching. Despite being 3 on 1, it's almost more than a match for them.. but they figure out.. someone else is doing the talking. The fight ends with Jester King of Beasts roaring on the scene, in a dramatic egotistical fashion.. it leaves a red ball in Catrina's mouth, leaving her in a fettish suit which I'll let Cat describe herself.. This is expected to be a DIRECT lead in to the finale, since voting is to be done tomorrow - as in Sunday September 13th, 2009.. Thank you to all who roleplayed. Sorry this went on like, four times as long as a normally too long mission.. But maybe we can get back on track now? SD/ sg   -------------   Scorecard - archive copy Posted by: AIL (Dash)   (My own post for AIL’s boards)   For the first time ever, I'm going to go ahead and post voter comments after this. Hopefully, it'll help everyone understand how the vote went and how to improve in the future. Congratulations to Shamus and myself for taking the high votes. We had some different people raking this week, with Catrina not doing as hot as normal, and Prince Blahking and Zanther Wolf doing better than usual, which was nice to see. The voting is again done thanks to Mario, who's voted for us a couple of times in the past. He's got a keen eye for quality and story, and an excellent ability to provide voter feedback as you'll see here. I'll post his scores along with the new season totals, and I'll post his feedback in his own words shortly. There's a lot of characters I want to see more of. The combination of Zanther Wolf and my own Becky Joy.. as well as Lapine, Todd, and Vixen. Of course, Wolf, Becky, Lapine and Todd all debut this mission Remember, current mission rp was extended til the end of January 2010! Get to writing and co writing, and hopefully we'll get one or two live co writes into this! :) Here's Mario's votes!   MEAT CAR MISSION Samus XTreme - 20 The Guacanator - 15 Todd Blackpaws 5 Lapine - 5 Vixen - 5   IMPRESS FOR SUCCESS Sebastian Dash - 20 Prince Blahking - 10 Becky Joy -16 Zanther Wolf - 16 Catrina Whiteclaw - 10     And that should bring us up to this Season total.   Season total so far.... Dash - 144 Catrina- 127 Raw Hide - 85 Feena - 84 Shamus - 58 Vixen - 45 Riko- 32 Konall - 28 Blahking -26 Fluffy Hamster - 24 The Chad - 19 Becky Joy -16 Zanther Wolf - 16 The Guacanator - 15 Vivace - 14 Fenninarnos - 5 Todd Blackpaws - 5 Lapine - 5 Next post is Mario's own words! - SD/ sg   -------------   Voter comments (Mario) Posted by: AiL   Well, I got a bit tired at the end and realized I promised to get this in today so I will cease and desist with comments because I can't think of anything reasonable. In fact, I hope my critique is of the right order because I'm not used to voting or judging material of this type... so I hope it’s not a bit misguided because I'm more used to e-wrestling. In any event, I don't think though that the winners are really open to debate but if it seems like I am sticking on a point that isn't really so important in the AIL world then you know why. That is all. -M     RP TITLE: INTERLUDE: A new clan enters!, FIDO, indeed! By: Higgy/Cheatum/Council RP grade / vote (if any): n Comments: Brownie points for the breaking news about the new clan. What I liked: The creativity of the announcements. The characterization of using Cheatum able to help with Higgy's liquor lisc problem to his advantage. What I didn’t like: Addressing the announcement of a new clan wouldn't have been detailed more or seemed to be a bigger deal? It seemed that the segue way into the Meat Car issue came too quick without dwelling on the enormity of the announcement. Suggestions : More material initially about the council. I guess as someone who isn't a regular reader it seemed a bit rushed but with Cheatum making his 'accord' and announcement of the rival clan and also using Higgy's lisc plight to his advantage is clever. It goes some way to showing his character indeed. But I would've liked to seem more in the beginning about the council without assuming I already know what they were. RP TITLE: IMPRESS FOR SUCCESS: A lil bar in South Degrassi, A proper cowrite and plan with Blahking! By: Dash/Blahking RP grade / vote (if any): Comments: Well written. And I have now discovered the concept of Hamster spies... that idea rules! Ahem, in any event, it was a great start for these two but Blahking kids a bit more kudos on this piece because it was his idea after Dash already seemed to have a more straightforward deal to attend to... well as straightforward as stopping the hijinks of a hybrid yeti can get but you catch my drift. What I liked: The little intricate details of the piece that showed off the good points of both characters. The mention of using 'different names' at the start was a nice touch. The carnival idea was great and it seemed that the Blahking had all bases covered in his plan to garner the attention of the muscle guild. What I didn’t like: It got to a point in the RP where it wasn't really tension I would call it but the mood got serious quickly. As if Dash maybe had some sort of problem with the Blahking that maybe was beyond him 'not being around lately' or was that just it? Not sure. Suggestions: A quick line or two about the prior relationship between Dash and the Blahking wouldn't have hurt but I can't fault you there as I am not a regular reader and these are perhaps things I should already know... but still worth mentioning.   RP TITLE: Meat car: Dude...I don't feel so high, Dude...These RPs are getting shorter. By: Shamus RP grade / vote (if any): Comments: It made me LOL a few times. What I liked: Pulling out the wallet in the times of distress was great. Shamus is a very entertaining character getting into hijinks but more than that the segue way into the relevant mission-related info... even if the message was dismissed but it totally fits the character from what I gather from my first looksee. Great change of pace from what I've read so far. As they say variety is the spice of life! What I didn’t like: Nothing... it was totally fun all the way through. Suggestions: RP TITLE: IMPRESS for SUCCESS: Welcome to Wolf's Jungle!, Becky Joy & Zanther_Wolf, Party Animals! By: Zanther Wolf, Becky Joy RP grade / vote (if any): Comments: Well written intro. What I liked: The portrayal of the relationship between Joy and Wolf is positive. What I didn’t like: Not as much I didn't like as per say I wanted more... Suggestions: RP TITLE: Meat car mission: The meat car's a lie., Wait, no it's not. The title's a lie. By: Shamus RP grade / vote (if any): Comments: Even better than the first. Shamus may be frustrated about being 'shown up' but she sure is really efficient at helping him out regardless I must say! Great job! What I liked: The cameo by the ex was always nice. Love the humor, even the PETA reference was funny. Focus was directly on the competition and was interesting to. What I didn’t like: Inuya seemed confused about the appearance of Mimi a set up or little prelude on that would've kept the ending from seeming so abrupt on her part. Suggestions:   RP TITLE: Meatcar Mission: Old Friends, Enough Said. By: Guacanator RP grade / vote (if any): Comments: Everything else was fine and the bit of a snag at the end was very redeeming because perhaps things were moving a bit quickly there otherwise... What I liked: The mixing in of the backstory with current material keeps the reader informed. What I didn’t like: I didn't particularly the format which was a bit confusing. Suggestions: A little bit clarity on the dialogue though that is just aesthetically. RP TITLE: IMPRESS for Success (Becky Joy), She's a hyper one alright, Mr. Guard! By: Becky Joy RP grade / vote (if any): Comments: I for one think she's adorable. What I liked: The personality quirk and how the writer made a point to showcase the reaction of others in response to her 'different' personality. What I didn’t like: It was a short one with her building towards the mission working at a slower pace than some of the others per say but I will have to hold of on judging that until we read on and see where this goes... Suggestions: RP TITLE: Impress for Success (Dash): Meetings I: Dash's POV, Dash runs into an old friend.. By: Dash RP grade / vote (if any): Comments: What I liked: The detail. For a random bumping of heads in the dark I could very well visualize everything even the expression on Dash's face. What I didn’t like: I don't think flipping the order of events really served a purpose because while the encounter between Dash and Katherine was well written the climax of the piece in my mind was still the impending fight we were treated to at the start and the order of events probably should have reflected that. Suggestions: RP TITLE: Meatcar Mission - New Enemies, Just one task left... By: Guacantor RP grade / vote (if any): Comments: What I liked: The level of creativity. The subtlety he had to use in the beginning to the indignity and physicality of breaking him arm later on he truly went through the ringer of sorts trying to complete his meatcar. And in the midst of it he may have very well started a war if 'THIS MEANS WAR' is anything to go by. And we all love war. What I didn’t like: Suggestions: RP TITLE: Impress f or Success: Uncomfy silence, Swift/ Dash By: Swift/ Dash RP grade / vote (if any): Comments: What I liked: The chance meeting wasn't so chance as you took the time make a good reason and explain the backstory behind Katherine just happening to bump into dash on the trail of a giant hybrid yeti that's rumored to have wings. Yikes. What I didn’t like: "Think it’s a trap?" "SURE, LET'S GO!" Suggestions: Maybe there was a way we can simulate peril for our heroes without having duck under the caution tape without giving it a second thought... RP TITLE: (Impress for Success) Becky Joy: Don't eat ur pets By: Becky Joy RP grade / vote (if any): Comments: What I liked: The characterization is strong again but I can't help but feel there was a lack of surprise... I mean, the voice was there but we didn't find out what it was behind it for that to constitute a surprise... then Zanther Wolf comes with berries I guess that's the dinner from what I gather from the first RP. What I didn’t like: Suggestions: RP TITLE: Crossover: Debut of Todd Blackpaws and Lapine!, Also featuring Dash, Vixen, and Catrina By: Todd Blackpaws, Lapine RP grade / vote (if any): Comments: This piece was apparently written a few days before it was posted so it's backdated to the start of the mission pretty much. What I liked: More introductions of new characters are always nice. New blood is good for everyone, yay! However it is terribly difficult to try following who likes who so thanks for the bit of backstory and clarifying the battle lines with this piece. Great dialogue that went some ways to capturing the tensions. What I didn’t like: Suggestions: RP TITLE: Impress for sucess (Zanther), also featuring: Becky Joy, Shelly Girl By: Zanther Wolf RP grade / vote (if any): Comments: What I liked: The fight was great. It was a back and forth not a squash as Zanther took his licks at first before using the indignity of the situation to fuel a comeback. Ah, all this because of stolen berries. Damn thieves. What I didn’t like: Suggestions:   -------------     Ordered by alphabet MISSION points!   KOL mission point totals- winner in gold Sebastian Dash - 20 Shamus XTreme - 20 Becky Joy Zanther Wolf The Guacanator Prince Blahking Catrina Whiteclaw Todd Blackpaws Lapine Vixen Ordered by alphabet SEASON total to date so far   KOL mission point totals- current leader in gold Konall Bearsmasher (28) Todd Blackpaws (5) Prince Blahking (26) SEBASTIAN DASH (144) Feena (84) Fluffy Hamster (24) The Guacanator (15) Raw Hide (85) Becky Joy (16) Lapine (5) Riko (32) The Chad (19) Catrina Whiteclaw (127) Zanther Wolf (16) Shamus XTreme (58) Vivace (14) Vixen (45)